A very interesting poem and I like it, yes your poem was believable and your dialog flowed naturally.

the time, place and other setting characteristics worked together.

What I liked most was the fact that even though you were having so many troubles you seemed to stay positive in your poem. there was nothing I liked least about your poem. What stood out was that you were still able to get into, post this poem with all the difficulty you had trying to sign in to this site I am assuming.

Many Blessings, Sharmelle

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