"WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" 

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Hi, BlueMoon. My name is River and I'm reviewing Lucky Fishing Boy

What Attracted Me to Your Story: I'm reviewing this story as part of the MHWA Monthly Mental Health Challenge in hopes of getting to know my fellow challengers better.

Overall Impression: The first paragraph hooked me and made me want to continue reading. You made good use of the word prompts and I liked how you highlighted them by using different colours.

Character Development Nate stood out in this story and his personality was so believable I could visualize him.

My Favourite Part: the line suddenly snapped and Nate fell backward on his backside.

Things that impressed me: I was impressed by your ability to create an interesting story using so few words and the prompts. Nice job.

Some Constructive Criticism: I noticed two small errors.

She patched up the hole where his ones toes once stuck out.

The fish still twitched in the net but under it a gold coin. You need to add a word here. under it lay a gold coin.

Final Thoughts:I thought the ending was excellent.

Write On

The Blue Angel aka River

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