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Dragons in the Garden  [E]
Through the eyes of a child: Magic still exists. A Story-Poem Entry
by 🌕 HuntersMoon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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This was such a delightful little story in a poem. I've written two books about dragons and love to read about them from others. Thank you so much for sharing your talent here for us to read.

I giggled when I read the part of 'she's never stepped on me.' That was so cute.

I did have some concern about the rhythm and meter. Some of the sentences just didn't flow well. I even counted the syllables to make sure I wasn't messing up somehow. Maybe if you counted them you could see what I mean. The second line in some of them is what threw me off.

I like the part about the between place too. Again. Thanks so much.
love, LinnAnn
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