your poetry writing made me feel like it was something I've been through because I am Bipolar too. It has invoked emotions from my past, but everything is ok there.

I can relate to your poetry writing through a personal experience years ago.

Your plot did interest me because I can relate to this poetry writing. your characters were believable. Yes, your dialog flowed naturally for me in your poetry writing.

The time, place and other setting characteristics worked together in your poetry writing.

What I like most is...
"One minute calm, the next I’m tweaked
One day okay, but then I’m freaked.
I wish I knew just what to say
To show you all will be okay
But I don’t even know what’s true
For in my mind it’s all askew."

There is nothing I like least about your poetry writing.

What stood out for me in a good way is...
"I want you here, I need you here
But in your eyes I see the fear
I’m nothing more than human form
You look at me as if deformed
We’ll be okay, I promise this
Right now, my mind's a blank abyss."

The changes I would make for this poetry writing would be in the last stanza the second line you should add a comma after eyes, and the third line could say "the human form.

Many Blessings, Sharmelle



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