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 |  | Out Of Place  [13+] A man watches as his reality slowly fades away...(Cramp Winner & 2017 Quill Nominee!)  |
| (4.5)| Hello , I enjoyed reading your story. I am no expert and what's following is my humble review which you may choose to ignore.   Why I chose this item: This is a part of the Angle Army July Challenge. I was to review something from your port and ran into this one. The tag line invoked my interest.  My favorites parts: I liked the eccentricity [if this is the right word] of your imagination. This piece is something totally different. With simple language and nothing gore you have created horror in this story.  Characters: The only character is the narrator. He seemed to be very calm minded and cool. Even when watching his neighborhood disappear, his limbs disappear right in front of his eyes, he didn't scream in fear, not once. In fact he noted things down in order. Well that's one appreciable attribute.  StoryLine/Plot :The plot was simple and a easy to follow. There were no twist or turns yet it was fascinating.  Action/Flow : The action flowed smoothly till the end.  Ending: The end leaves questions in the readers mind.  Overall impression: Overall it was a good and entertaining read. One question though: If he couldn't see the cars or the people, how did he get to the library?  A few Typos:None that I noticed. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **  Rima...Happy Writing  !!!  A "The WDC Angel Army" Angelilc review... ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
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You responded to this review 07/03/2018 @ 12:46pm EDT