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Review by Angus
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Rated: GC | (4.5)
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*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*

Ahoy, Cat, and once again, happy belated WdC 'birthday' on here!
*Music1* In the midnight hour... *Music2*
You claim this isn't your best work, but it's still pretty good, and it was good enough to win the contest.
Writing self-dialogue is good way to express horror because it seems to make it more personal (to the reader!), and I like how you did this. You brought the reader into your world as this new chemical is unleashed into you, and the idea of a Utopia that turns upside down was a great ending. Nice and simple too. I seriously think you should make this a little longer (after I get caught up with the weekly winners), maybe add a bit more fear during that period when time seems to stand still. But I know how changing a piece can sometimes be disastrous, so it's kind of a flip of coin.
Well done, my friend!
Good to see back in "SCREAMS!!!" 
Kee ponw ritin gon, and may you have more wonderful 'birthdays' on WdC!

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