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 | Greg The Super  [13+] New super hero in town thinks he is hiding his identity but the whole office is helping  |
| (3.5)| Hello West, I enjoyed reading your story. I am no expert and what's following is my humble review which you may choose to ignore.  First of all,  WELCOME  to WDC If you enjoy writing and reading, you have landed on the right planet...    Why I chose this item: This is a part of Angel August Challenge. I found this on the home page and the tagline held my interest.  My favorites parts: The best thing was the idea that went behind writing the story. It was nice and simple yet humorous.  Characters: The characters were okay. They were not well formed but I guess that's alright in a short story of this size. But what I felt is that there was very little description of Greg. We didn't get to know what kind of superhero he was and what trouble he faced in office.  StoryLine/Plot :The plot was simple and straightforward. It didn't have twists or surprises but the content itself was entertaining.  Action/Flow : The whole story was in a single flow. It started with the office members planning to cover for Greg and ended up in successfully doing so.  Overall impression: Overall it was a good read. But It was hard to read the lines for they seemed to stand on top of one another. Please double space your lines. A new dialog is always a new line.  A few Typos:None that I noticed. Do keep writing... and welcome to WDC... ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **  Rima...Happy Writing  !!!  A "The WDC Angel Army" Angelilc review... ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
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You responded to this review 08/07/2018 @ 5:10pm EDT