Hello!

I found this through the 'Read and Review' tool and thought that I would leave you with my thoughts.

I thought the piece was really interesting. It was somewhere between poetry and story, and the imagery at the beginning really pulled me in. One thing that I think was really unique about it was pairing all of the dark imagery and poetic style with the very friendly and optimistic messages at the end. It was an abrupt shift, that I think could have used a little more time spent in transition from one to the other but overall, it made a pretty strong impact as is.

There were some good messages in here, the style was very engaging, and I think you're off to a great start with this. It could be fleshed out into a whole story, but even as is it gives the reader quite a bit to ponder, which is a great thing.

I hope that you continue working with this or other pieces, and I wish you all the best in doing so. You've got a good style that I think will help you a lot no matter what you're working on.

Sincerely,




-Cat









My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .