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The Boogeyman  [ASR]
My first time writing a nonet, themed for horror.
by C. Yarn Weaver
Review of The Boogeyman  
Review by Azrael Tseng
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hi C. Yarn Weaver , I'm really glad I found this. Here's what I *Heart* about "The Boogeyman"  -

1) This is an excellent use of the nonet form, using the shortening lines to build up tension which works really well for a horror-themed poem. Again, you demonstrate your personal style of using different colours for impact, which I find very distinctive. The idea of a father imparting words of wisdom regarding his own childhood fear is quietly effective, giving even more substance to the horror of the boogeyman.
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2) Some creepy imagery used here, although they're exclusively tactile. How about involving a couple of other senses as well? You used A feeler in the dark- a rough grasp. a cold glass, A claw, a zombie's hand shake. -- five evocative images but all to do with touch. It might be even more effective if you got smell and sound into it as well, since the boogeyman hides in the dark. Furthermore, a cold glass doesn't quite chill me as much as you might intend it to. I would suggest keeping the feeler and the zombie handshake, and perhaps replacing the others with even creepier images.
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Thanks for a great read!

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