Hello Amelie,



My Thoughts: I think it is wonderful how you put all of your feelings here for this poem and that you don't hold back. The mind is very powerful and has a part in making us who we are, as far as how we think of others and judgement, it plays a big role.

My Favorite Part: I like when you talk about the mind being uncensored. Man, if we said everything we thought, it wouldn't bode well. Sometimes we hold back, to keep a job, to not hurt someone's feelings, to stay out other people's business etc. But, our minds sure love to wonder. I know mine does, sometimes I can't even sleep because my mind goes crazy, analyzing many things and wondering, even thinking of stories or poems.

My Suggestions: My suggestion would be to now think of presentation, you've got your wonderful thoughts, take a little more time on them and write with a pattern in mind, maybe count the syllables, or try a new poetry form. This is fun and has helped me tremendously. Not to mention, trying new ways of writing improves your skills and also helps make for a better read as it will create a better flow.

Thanks for sharing your wonderful poetry!

Sincerely,
MoonFae
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