Greetings, typingrhyme ! I found your item request, "Invalid Item" , in "The Shameless "Plug" Page" forum and decided to review it. First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. Flow This flows along pretty well. You might want to read it aloud a few times or have someone read it to you. I always do this with my own poetry, just to be sure the meter flows throughout. Punctuation/Grammar I noticed right away that you use very little punctuation, which is fine. If this had been written for children, however, you might consider adding punctuation. But I see your genre choices are Nature and Animals, so no worries. There is a freedom of writing poetry without punctuation and it is not distracting at all in this piece. My favorite stanza: When I’m near a stream And the moon shines bright I’ll go for a swim And eat fish that night Nicely written! And to answer your question at the end of your poem, I would not welcome a raccoon, lol. I've had too many problems with them in the garden and birdfeeders. But I know people who absolutely adore raccoons. Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ") My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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