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Review of Motherhood  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Pumpkin2* Greetings, penn ! I found your item request, "Invalid Item" , in Random Reviews and decided to review it. *Smile*

         First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. *Smile* Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

Flow
         This absolutely flows from the heart. Her thoughts, her fears, her love for the child. *Heart*

Punctuation/Grammar
         Looks good! The only thing you might consider changing is:

You've made me want to fall on my mother's feet
to
You've made me want to fall at my mother's feet.

         *Starb* My favorite lines:
                             We're growing together. We are seeing the world like it's new.
I remember this so well after having my first baby. It was a brand new world. *Heart*

*Thumbsup* Nicely written! I really connected well with this piece. *Smile*

Have a great day and...
*Pumpkin2*  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! *Pumpkin2*
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