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         *Pumpkin2* Greetings, Lou-Here By His Grace ! I found your item, "Invalid Item" , in Random Reviews and decided to review it. *Smile*

         First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. *Smile* Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

Flow
         I love this acrostic! The flow is great and I thought it worked well for you to repeat Under a hot sun for both Us. Very nice. *Smile*

Punctuation/Grammar
         Everything looks great... no issues with punctuation or grammar.

Suggestions/Thoughts
         Your title isn't spelled correctly. *Smile* You have JULY FORTH, and I'm pretty sure you meant JULY FOURTH *Wink* You also might consider lining up all the first letters so JULY FOURTH stands out. But that is up to you. It's fine how it is now, too. *Bigsmile* I love each and every line you've written. Nice work!

         *Starb* My favorite lines...
                             Riflemen fire 21 shots.
                             Taps from a battered polished bugle.

*Thumbsup* Nicely written! I hope my suggestions were helpful. *Smile*

Have a great day and...
*Pumpkin2*  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! *Pumpkin2*
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