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         *Pumpkin2* Greetings, rl_gallear! I found your item, "Invalid Item" , in Random Reviews and decided to review it. *Smile*

         First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. *Smile* Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

My First Impression
         Life can be such an awakening, can't it? You walked through this piece leaving this reader with the feeling you or someone close to you have experienced this first hand.

Punctuation/Grammar/Typos
         Looks good!

Suggestions/Thoughts
         Your rhyming is great! Your meter is good, and your message/story is the best of all. Nice work.
Here are just a few suggestions:
you are a Mom --> you are a mom
Its sure that we --> It's sure that we

         *Starb* My favorite lines...
                             Far more than we expected landed on our plate.
                             And now we have a baby, where did that come from?

*Thumbsup* Nicely written! I hope my suggestions were helpful. *Smile*

Have a great day and...
*Pumpkin2*  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! *Pumpkin2*
~Cubby ")
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