INTRODUCTION

Hello Apologizing Adolescent ,

I found your item "The Lakefront"  in the review request thread and was interested to see what it was all about. It was a quick read and since I've read it, I thought it would be good to leave you with my thoughts.

So let's get right into it.

WHAT I LIKED:

Moments

What I liked best about the poem is perhaps summarized by your final line:



I think there's something beautiful about introspection during those quiet moments, and it's something that I think is a great topic for poetry. It summarized what was so beautiful about the poem and brought the piece to an eloquent conclusion that hit on the perfect note.

The last line was good, but I don't think it would have had the same level of impact if it hadn't been for the gentle build up provided by the previous stanzas, and the overall soft tone of the piece that so perfectly captured the sentiment.



I want to start by saying I don't think there was anything wrong with the poem at all. That being said, I do have one suggestion for you.

Experiment

For as much as I enjoyed the piece, I think there might be even more potential here. It's a very versatile concept that's easy to relate to, and the little moments culminating into the simple pleasure of enjoying a scene could be expressed so many different ways.

If you're looking for ways to make the poem stand out more or even just looking to learn more about different kinds of poetic form, a piece like this would be a great way to start. Maybe try to expand on this, play around with the format and phrasing just a little bit. It's an idea I think could also be converted into different forms if you wanted to tackle the subject again (of little moments, if not the Lakefront specifically.)

CONCLUSION:

I hope that this review was at least a little helpful. I enjoyed the poem a lot and hope that you're able to get it to where you want it, even if I didn't have any outright suggestions for it. I'd be happy to read more of your work in the future, as well, and hope that I get the chance to do so.

Sincerely,

-Cat
















My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .