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         *Pumpkin2* Greetings, Netty ! I found your item, "Invalid Item" , in Random Reviews and decided to review it. *Smile*

         First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. *Smile* Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

My First Impression
         A short poem about followwing Jesus and doing his will in order to receive Eternal Life.

Punctuation/Grammar/Typos
         There are a few punctuation issues you might consider changing. *Smile*
In the first line, The promise is fulfilled Jesus Christ has risen!!!!!. you might want to add some punctuation for pause after the word fulfilled One humble option is: The promise is fulfilled: Jesus Christ has risen!
         You also might want to capitalize the n in now in the second line.

Suggestions
         You also will want to capitalize the h in "his" and "him" in lines 2 and 3. *Smile*

         *Starb* My favorite line...
                             Let's rejoice today.
         I believe this would be a great qY to start every day. *Smile*

*Thumbsup* Nicely written! I hope my suggestions were helpful. *Smile*

Have a great day and...
*Pumpkin2*  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! *Pumpkin2*
~Cubby ")
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