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 Review #4447891 |
 | Woman from Norse  [E] A limerick  |
| (4.0)  Greetings, Chris Breva ! I found your item, "Woman from Norse" , in Random Reviews and decided to review it.  First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.My First Impression I love limericks! They aren't always easy to write, but they're fun.  And yours begins very nicely. I do have just a few humble suggestions though, I'll leave under Suggestions.Punctuation/Grammar/Typos You were consistent with not using punctuation, so that's all good. No grammar issues or typos, either. Suggestions  If you omit the word young in your second line, you'll have eight beats, just like your first line. In your third line, try to drop it to five beats instead of six, to keep with the fourth line's five beats. I would suggest you consider replacing told her with said: Her husband said no Just a thought, but when I read your last line, the word bucked made me think of money (bucks) and I thought it might be quite witty if somehow you could incorporate that in the last line. Like I said, just a thought... I'm always thinking.   My favorite line...There was an old lady from Norse This is such a perfect way to begin a limerick!  Good job! I hope my suggestions were helpful. Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! ~Cubby ")    My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 10/26/2018 @ 8:24am EDT