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 | What Can We Do?  [E] When we see someone being bullied, what do we do?  |
| (4.5)  Greetings, RomySki ! I found your item, "What Can We Do?" , in Random Reviews and decided to review it.  First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.My First Impression Oh, this piece tore at me... I'm sure this sort of thing happens all the time and you are absolutely right when you write: It's because, what can we do? If we step in, it's an automatic ticket to 'Bully Central'. That is a place you never want to go. Punctuation/Grammar/Typos/Other Suggestions  There were a few areas I might have added commas, but definitely nothing to worry about. I'm a comma person, so I tend to perhaps overdo them at times.  Just remember, anywhere you have a pause, plug in a comma.  In the 7th paragraph, " he moved!" should appear as , "He moved!"Thoughts I have to be careful not to share too deeply about my thoughts about bullying. I'll just say it sure is tough on those who are the brunt of it. How horrible for them. When you wrote how the boy didn't show up the following day, I was worried he had taken his life. I was happier knowing he had moved. And I felt there was hope that he wouldn't get bullied at the next place. But then that made me wonder if there was some reason he was being bullied--not that any reason is the right reason--like appearance, gender issues, race, physically or mentally challenged, and so on. Sometimes there is no reason at all why someone is bullied though, other than the unlucky chosen one. It's so sad. So...so...sad.  Thank you for sharing this well-written piece.  My favorite lines...A chance I'll never get again, and I wasted it. Words spoken so truthfully in regret. This sentence made me pause and ponder before I continued.  Nicely written! I hope my suggestions were helpful. Oh, and by the way, Welcome to WDC! Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! ~Cubby ")    My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 10/27/2018 @ 12:09am EDT