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Review by Cubby
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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         *Pumpkin2* Greetings, alfred booth, wanbli ska ! I found your item, "Invalid Item" , in Random Reviews and decided to review it. *Smile*

         First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. *Smile* Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

My First Impression

         I absolutely love this piece! You seriously should consider sending it in somewhere, it's that good. I was moved by the individual windows to each person's own connection with a scarf, socks, and a dime. I can't say enough to explain my adoration of your talent shining through this free-form sestina. Excellent!

Punctuation/Grammar/Typos

         I found nothing distracting in this piece

Suggestions/Thoughts
         I have no suggestions. This is a beautifully written piece that will stay with me a long, long time. Your choice of no capitalization and little punctuation add to this well-written poem, too. Have you written any more free-form sestinas? If not, please consider it! You are clearly meant to write a collection of these, in my own humble opinion.

         *Starb* My favorite lines...

                             his soul battered like his socks
                             his daughter knit that old faded scarf
                             years ago when happiness was in the air
                             and truly a smile could keep a guy warm
(It was so hard to pick my favorite lines, as all 39 lines seeped into my heart!)

*Thumbsup* Nicely written! *Smile*

Have a great day and...
*Pumpkin2*  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! *Pumpkin2*
~Cubby ")
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