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 My Heart Caught Your Arrow   [E]
To the boy that looked in the wrong place.
by Emilee Anne
Review by Cubby
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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         *Pumpkin2* Greetings, Emilee Anne ! I found your item, "My Heart Caught Your Arrow " , in Random Reviews and decided to review it. *Smile*

         First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. *Smile* Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

My First Impression
         This is beautifully written. I love the repetition in the first half of the first lines in Stanzas 1, 2, 3, and 5... My heart caught your arrow, which is also a great choice for your title. *Smile*

Punctuation/Grammar/Typos
         The only thing worth mentioning here, are the periods at the end of lines 2 in both the 1st and 2nd stanzas. You might consider replacing them with a comma for better flow. Other than that, I've no other suggestions. *Smile*

Thoughts
         I love the innocence in this piece, the hopefulness, the determination. I think what else I really like, is that it's not sad and depressing, you've a positive perspective on your love for someone who hasn't quite looked your way yet. *Smile*

         *Starb* My favorite lines...
                             My heart caught your arrow, but you can't find it.
                             You're not looking in the right place.

*Thumbsup* Nicely written! *Smile*

Have a great day and...
*Pumpkin2*  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! *Pumpkin2*
~Cubby ")
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