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         *Pumpkin2* Greetings, willy ! I found your item, "Invalid Item" , in Random Reviews and decided to review it. *Smile*

         First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. *Smile* Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

My First Impression
         Been there, done that! *Laugh* My guess would be most of us have experienced this very same thing, exactly! *Bigsmile* It seems like I'm either in that snowy-paged funk, or I'm writing like crazy. I enjoyed reading your poem... thanks for sharing!

Punctuation/Grammar/Typos
         There was only one spot that I noticed a wee inconsistency:
Stanza 1, Line 5: That once crystallised --> that once crystallised
         Since this line is a continuation of the line previous to it, you'll want uncap the beginning of Line 5 to stay consistent with the rest of your poem. You've also got a period in Line 4 which you'll want to omit for better flow. *Smile* Of course, if you disagree, just leave it as it is. *Wink*

Thoughts
         Hope by now your writer's block is gone! *Bigsmile* Sometimes entering a contest helps, or being inspired by a prompt can get you thinking.

         *Starb* My favorite line...
                             This nude page blinds like new snow

*Thumbsup* Nicely written! I hope my suggestions were helpful. *Smile*

Have a great day and...
*Pumpkin2*  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! *Pumpkin2*
~Cubby ")
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