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Review #4449478
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Review by Cubby
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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         *Pumpkin2* Greetings, 💟Crissy~Hijacked ! I found your item, "Invalid Item" , in Random Reviews and decided to review it. *Smile*

         First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. *Smile* Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

My First Impression
         How pretty! I even liked the pink font, which normally, I might find it distracting, but it actually added to the piece, heightening its sweet and simple elegence. *Smile*

Punctuation/Grammar/Typos
         Your punctuation appeared consistent and I noted no typos. My only suggestion is, however, in Stanza 1, Line 3: when nothing was between us You might consider a stronger verb here in place of was. I think it would give it a little more substance. One example:
when nothing lived between us or something similar to that. *Wink*

Thoughts
         I felt like I was floating upon each word as I read along each line. Very easy to absorb and enjoy. Thank you for sharing!

         *Starb* My favorite line...
                             Sweet magnolia filled our lungs,
         !Beautiful!

*Thumbsup* Nicely written! I hope my suggestions were helpful. *Smile*

Have a great day and...
*Pumpkin2*  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! *Pumpkin2*
~Cubby ")
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