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         *Pumpkin2* Greetings, John Yossarian ! I found your item, "Invalid Item" , in Random Reviews and decided to review it. *Smile*

         First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. *Smile* Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

My First Impression
         I really enjoyed this piece! *Smile* What a great idea, using a doggy door as a portal. It's one twist I've not ever heard!

Punctuation/Grammar/Typos
         I only noticed one typo... In the very last sentence, Sometime you could hear should be plural Sometimes you could hear or you could say... At times, you could hear. Other than that, nothing else distracted me. *Smile*

Thoughts
         Fun visuals, lots of action, believable dialogue, and a blob dog... What else could a reader ask for? *Bigsmile* This was a very entertaining piece! Thanks for sharing!

         *Starb* My favorite line...
                             They seemed to know something was expected of them and were eager to please but ignorant of the request.
         I've had dogs most of my life and you really hit the nail on the head with this sentence, lol. You know how dogs are, that is obvious. *Wink* I've had this very same observation, a few times, to say the least. *Laugh*

*Thumbsup* Nicely written! I hope my suggestions were helpful. *Smile*

Have a great day and...
*Pumpkin2*  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! *Pumpkin2*
~Cubby ")
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