The Elephant Who Ate Too Much [E] A children's poem about an elephant and a banana tree. |
Greetings, Tim Chiu ! I found your item, "The Elephant Who Ate Too Much" , in Random Reviews and decided to review it. First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. My First Impression I love children's poetry and enjoyed this poem very much. Punctuation/Grammar/Typos, etc. The first time I read through it, I stumbled a bit in parts, but I always try to read poetry through a few times, getting the feel of the rhythm, rhyme, and flow. I had no issues the 2nd and 3rd times through. This is visually enjoyable and fun to read. And your rhymes are not forced at all. Your punctuation is right on! I found no grammar issues or typos. Suggestions/Thoughts No suggestions. I enjoyed this very much! My favorite lines... He’d eaten too much, saw his appetite end – The elephant had ingested more than his fill… Nicely written! I hope my suggestions were helpful. Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! ~Cubby ") My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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