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This is a very evocative poem, I could absolutely visualise this horse on the shore. I like the way the images and sounds of the horse mingle with those of the sea -- for example, his mane with the mist, and hooves with the pounding of the waves.

I have two suggestions, please feel free to use them or ignore then.

1. You talk of his hoof-prints being left behind. But I immediately pictured these as being washed away by the tide, leaving nothing behind. Would you like to consider this as an ending to your poem? I personally feel it would add some pathos.

2. Maybe you'd like to use some WritingML, like centralise, font and colour, to enhance the look of this poem. Also, you might want to look at the 'stock cover' pictures that Writing Dot Com offers, if you'd like to add an image.

Write On!


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