(Note -- I was putting my thoughts down as I read, and I decided to keep it that way, so you know what one reader's experience was with this piece.)

This is a very important piece. People through the years, and especially the young, seem to misunderstand what 'love' is about.

Here are some suggestions, feel free to use them or disregard them!

I'd suggest you pick a 'type' -- Article, or essay. "Other" doesn't show up on lists and your work gets less exposure on site.

Maybe you'd like to look at the formatting of the paragraphs, and the spacing between sentences. Also, the use of capital letters. I think maybe you should capitalise only 'Love' as a proper noun, and let all the others be lower-case.

In the second paragraph, I didn't quite understand the sentence beginning 'when your emotion is the driver'.

Are the quotes original, or are they someone else's words? You need to clarify either way -- say that they're your own, or give the name of the originator.

Ah -- I see some anti-woman quotes there. Well, I'm sorry if you've had bad experiences, but it's not advisable to generalise like that, you lose your credibility with the reader. You certainly lost some credibility with me when I came to those! Many of those quotes appear out-dated, for a male-dominated society.

Overall, this piece started well, and I was looking forward to reading more, but it lost its balance for me as it went along. I think if you could restore that balance, you have the potential of a great message.



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