Hello Raghav R



Disclaimer:
These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful and disregard the rest

I am reviewing "Off with the Veil" as your request.

Starting with the beginning the title is catchy. It adds some mystery. The form is written well except for the last stanza. If you are trying to keep the rhyming scheme then the first two lines needs to be re-worked.

The rhythm is good, it moves the poem alone at a good pace. And each line flows nicely into the next line. Good use of punctuation and word placement. There is lots of imagery woven into your poem.

A few suggestions, in the first stanza place a comma after veil and change "And" to lower case. Not all lines have to be capitalized especially if you use a comma at the end of a line. The same for all your stanzas.

In the last stanza either place a comma between "veil veil" or change the second veil to another word.

My favorite lines are,
My soul delights in the pretty face
In which dwells beauty and grace,

Your glittering eyes it hides,
The rosy, sensuous lips besides,
These offer great imagery and how your soul delights is just amazing to me.

Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.


Gypsy Ann

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