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Given: Nov 22, 2018 at 8:51am
Length: 1,259 Characters |
1,068 w/o WritingML
Hello Bryan J Smith
This is an Angel Review
Disclaimer: These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful and disregard the rest
I thought I'd return the favor of reviewing one of your pieces. This one grabbed my attention. I don't read a lot of love stories but this one caught me. I have to say it is full of emotions, sadness and anger. And lots of imagery, I could see the story unfold as I read. I'm not for sure if this is poetry or a story for I caught lots of rhyming.
A few suggestions to offer: The lights were hot and we fought. cause you wanted to read since I was playing a game, Capitalize cause or change the period to a comma. and change the comma after game to a period.
you had worried me though
Capitalize you
The dogs came to you for Protection, and then you took a bath.
This line lost me, it feels out of place and makes no sense to me.
Over all it is well written. I am sorry for your loss.
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