So beautiful! Lovely emotions, conveyed in an evocative verse.

Um.
Shall I confess something?
Okay -- here goes. When I started reading, I wondered whether this poem was going to have a 'twist'. That it wasn't going to be about a couple's relationship, but about -- I dunno -- wrapping Christmas gifts? making cupcakes? So I was waiting for the twist to come.

When the twist didn't come, and it was about the relationship, I realised I'd been a bit of a -- a -- well a bit foolish (cynical?) to expect it. That it's just a very lovely poem about a beautiful moment. I read it again, and I then checked the genres and went 'aw'.

Suggestions:
Somehow, I think this poem would look better centralised, in italics, and maybe in 'times' font. Perhaps a chage of colour?

Write On!
- Sonali

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