Greetings from "The WDC Angel Army" Ha ha ha ha! Nice one. It built up well, and you revealed just the right amount of information at each step. Enjoyed the way you brought the messages into the phone-speak -- clever introduction of a third character! Suggestions: Hm. I don't usually do a 'if I'd written this piece' thing, but I'm going to here! (Feel free to ignore it totally!) I'd have liked to see a bit more 'nonsense' in the completion of what 'Google' actually said. Like 'Google said her star chart is compatible with yours, because you have Mars in the fifth moon cycle' or something. Generally, it's "I can and I will", isn't it? Because you need to be able to, first, before you decide you want to. Would you like to standardise the capital letter for 'Google'? Maybe italics for the incoming message ... ? Thank you for the chuckle! My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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