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General Impressions
This is a cute and clever concrete poem for the Once Upon a Contest. I'd like to point out a couple small things for you but it's a cute way to summarize the story. Nicely done!

Suggestions for improvement
- very poorly, they needed
-Daisy was there their only
- wasn't pleased with it at all.

Good luck in the contest!

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