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 The Birth of Star Shield  [13+]
How RimaD became The Star shield
by Rima...
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi!

It's been a pleasure to review your story "The Birth of Star Shield"  on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" 

Good story Rima. I like your scifi story.I like the writers name (Captain Nixie, Captain Lornda, Captain Eyestar) you have been used here. But what I like most is the part of the story “The ship was shaking tremendously now and I was sure it was falling apart when I realized that my hands seemed to melt into thin air.” I like the beginnings of your story. The endings seems little incomplete but I could imagine the rest of the story. I could see extra spaces between the lines. I think you can make bigger story from this piece. It would be interesting.

Thanks for sharing!
Best of luck.

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