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 Sweet Revenge  [13+]
Marge gets her revenge. Written for Daily Flash Fiction Challenge
by Beck Firing back up!
Review of Sweet Revenge  
Review by OOT™
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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First of all, happy account anniversary! I'm OOT™ , and I'm honored to review your work.

My Thoughts: I chose this little gem because I love flash fiction, and the title caught my eye. I wasn't disappointed. I know from experience how difficult it can be writing a meaningful story in 300 words or less, especially with prompts (I noticed the 3 words that were bold), but you have done a terrific job here.

You captured my attention from the beginning, because I immediately wondered how Marge would get her revenge on the apparently shallow Ken. I didn't have long to wait, and I wasn't disappointed! You incorporated the prompts flawlessly and came up with a rather original, humorous piece.

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My Suggestions: In the third paragraph, Marge sat back down. Prior to that, however, she was sitting at the bar and had only thought about leaving. I suggest that you clarify this by either mentioning that she stood up to leave or by omitting that she sat back down.

I would also suggest that you give the reader more information about David Wellington, by introducing him to the story as the author, David Wellington. Admittedly, while I realized he must be famous, I didn't immediately know who he was. *Blush*

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Overall: Thank you for sharing this short story. I thoroughly enjoyed the read. It was an honor to review your work, and I look forward to seeing more!

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