Hi, Schnujo is Late to Lannister , I'm OOT™ , and I'm honored to review your work.

My Thoughts: I decided to drop by your port since you are quickly becoming a good friend, and I'm glad I did! You have a lot of terrific writing! I chose this piece for many reasons. I am a huge fan of flash fiction, the title caught my eye and the genre was right up my alley.

I wasn't disappointed. With 100 words, you managed to tell a complete story...one that actually gave me goosebumps. With your descriptive writing, I could easily imagine the scene and feel the tension. Great job!

My Suggestions: In the third sentence, you have "if I he couldn't". The would "I" needs to be omitted. I have done this many times, and it's so easy to overlook when editing your own work. You don't expect it to be there, so you read it as if it wasn't.

A couple of sentences later, "I set me peas down..." I would suggest changing "me" to "my". Sometimes, I have difficulty reviewing work of authors from other countries because of the subtle differences in the languages, so if that is the case here, I apologize.

Overall: I'm glad I stopped by your port and read this little gem. I'm very impressed and will most definitely be dropping by again!



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .