Hi Casey ! I found your piece entered in "The Writer's Cramp"  and am reviewing it for "Invalid Item" !

Cute little comedic poem! I especially liked these phrases of yours: "sustenance might solace bring," "finds empty shelf. / No bread! No soup! And I must face the wife!" and of course the last two lines - very well done! To the best of my knowledge, you followed the form you chose well, and the lines read cleanly. I appreciate that you were able to tell a story as well.

I do have some general suggestions on the formatting of your piece. Your title and brief description fit well with the piece, but the first genre you have listed is "Contest," which isn't exactly true. Your piece is a "Contest Entry," but I would recommend making that the third genre, if you use it at all. I think it's important to make sure your piece can stand alone without having to have its identity revolve around being an entry in a contest. What I tend to do is put the contest information at the end of the piece in something that looks like this:

______________
Written for: "The Writer's Cramp" 
Prompt: Write about what happens in a grocery store the day before a snowstorm is predicted.
Line Count: 13
Form: Blank Verse, Iambic Pentameter
Author's Note ▼

The raw Writing ML of that is below for you to copy into your piece if you desire:

{size:5}{b}______________{/b}{/size}
{b}Written for:{/b} {item:333655}
{b}Prompt:{/b} Write about what happens in a grocery store the day before a snowstorm is predicted.
{b}Line Count:{/b} 13
{b}Form:{/b} Blank Verse, Iambic Pentameter
{dropnote:"Author's Note"}I like blank verse because I don't have to worry about the rhyming. If it happens, it happens. But if I can't find a rhyme that I like, or makes sense to the story, that's ok, too{/dropnote}

Consolidating that information all in one place in your item instead of above and below your piece will keep the reader's attention on your poem rather than on anything else. You may also consider increasing the size of the poem's font to further separate it from any notes as well.

Thank you for sharing your words! Take care,
Emily

You last responded to this review 01/21/2019 @ 5:12pm EST

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