Hi Willy
A good idea for a story. A group of people gathering for a common purpose. Not sure if the contagion was already present in the group before John joined.
The text would benefit from a few more commas.
I couldn’t see the relevance of the description of Neil’s education and struggle to get where he was unless you were going to use that later in the story.
The description of the group after death could have been a bit more graphic, but there was only one little slug ☹️
John took the fact that he was dead very well he wasn’t overly surprised.
I liked the idea though that we will see our lost ones again.
Thanks for sharing
Cheers Sue

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