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Fairy-Tale Ending  [ASR]
Princesses in fairy tales should have a say in who kisses them.
by Ben Langhinrichs
Review of Fairy-Tale Ending  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi Ben Langhinrichs ,
I'm just dashing through with a review!

Theme
The theme is of princesses and princes and fairytale endings. This reads almost like advice to them by the end.

Word Choice(s)
The word choices are clear and concise, there's no doubt as to how the author feels about the subject.

Flow
This flows well and follows the Ya Du form as far as I can tell. It is a tough form so kudos to you!

Imagery/Description
This is one area that seems a little lacking to me - there's not much description but there's so little room to do so I didn't find any fault with it. With only three stanzas available to use, you did a good job choosing wisely.

Tips, Tricks, & Tidbits
I'm not at all confident in the ellipses used. It could be a stylistic preference on my part but it broke up the flow too much to me.

I've given this a 5.0 because other than the grammar concern, this looked swell to me!

Gotta run, but this was fun!


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