Hi Apologue!

Please keep in mind these are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them!

Overall Impression: That's what you get for drinking bourbon!

Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:

1. In this section - I endure the reoccurring dream - you may want to change "reoccurring" to "recurring".

2. In this section - I sense dad reaching out - "Dad" should be capitalized.

3. In this section - burns twice as fast”. - I was going to tell you that the quotation marks come after the period, but, I looked it up and apparently the British do it both ways (I assume you are British based on your spelling of analyzed and paralyzed.)!

Readability: A well written and entertaining little read!

Suggestions: I have no suggestions for you to ponder.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina

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