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Rated: | (3.5)
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Hey there, bellaxoxo! First of all, welcome to WDC! I'm sure you'll love it here. I'm OOT™ , and I would be happy to help you with anything you need. Feel free to email me at any time!

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My Thoughts: This is a good idea for a short story. It's rather original, and the title in the description drew me in. I can't imagine the feelings someone would have if an imaginary friend they had during their childhood would reappear when they had reached adulthood. You did a good job of telling that story.

Please be careful and make sure that your story is properly edited prior to posting it for others to see. You want to make sure that people who read your writing are exposed to your best work. There is even a way to keep the story private until you feel that it is ready to be seen by others. If you need assistance with this, let me know, and I'll be happy to help.

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My Suggestions: There are numerous misspelled words and failures to properly space throughout this piece that could easily be caught if you perform a simple spellcheck. For instance, in the second line, "aren't" is spelled incorrectly. In the following sentence, "knelt" is spelled incorrectly, and you didn't space between "in" and "front".

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Overall: Thank you for sharing your writing with us. This is a good story that would be much better after a thorough edit. Again, if there's anything at all that I can do to assist you, please don't hesitate to let me know. I look forward to seeing more of your work!

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