Hello LazyWriter ,

Welcome to Writing.Com!!! I see you've just joined, barely 6 days ago! This is a wonderful writing community and I hope that you will be happy here.

I found this poem while searching for writings by new authors. And so, here I am to give you a review.

Title & Description:
The title of your poem seems fitting to the content of the poem and it's what initially attracted me to your poem.

The description line, directly below the title, gives the author the opportunity to clarify title and further lure in your reader. Stating that this poem was with regard to Remembrance Day accomplished that.

Rhythm/Meter:
Free verse is not entirely free so it's important for the poem to have rhythm and flow. This is what allows the reader to be wrapped in emotion and imagery. Something a teacher once taught me is that it can be beneficial to read your poem out loud, to yourself. Doing so can help you feel the rhythm and guide you with punctuation and line breaks. In a few places, I stumbled because of the lack of punctuation. I think a poem can be presented with no punctuation at all, but it needs to be omitted consistently throughout the writing. Once punctuation is used, it's important to use it correctly because it does help guide the rhythm.

The other thing that caught my attention is that you have four stanzas. The first two have four lines each, the third has seven, and then the last one has six. You may want to consider breaking this out into quatrains for the sake of consistency and appearance.

Emotional Content:
This poem is a very emotional one and I think it will resonate with many readers. My family is full of military veterans and I have friends who have lost loved ones in war or in the aftermath dealing with PTSD.

Grammar/Spelling:
There is an example where you used a passive verb, which makes the writing less direct:

All to placate a beast that cannot be quenched
Suggestion: All to placate a beast that none can quench.
In this example "quench' is an active verb.

Here is an example where changing the words slightly may improved reader impact and readability:

The peace we enjoy is the result of much woe
Suggestion: The peace we enjoy results from many woes.

Closing Thoughts:
Thank you for sharing your writing with us! I enjoyed reading your poem and I truly hope that you enjoy this site and all it has to offer. Please do not hesitate to email me if I can help in any way or if you have questions.

Kindest Regards, Lilli

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