Hi KukiGoret,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of confusion and fascination. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if these people will actually meet. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a group of lonely people who seem to be dreaming about each other. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a few structural issues that need your attention:


1)man and probably a little day dream, which she refused to admit of course,-There should be a comma after "man".

2)"Oh Nana, who said you're getting old." "Well, I'll eat no other woman's food but yours." He said stubbornly.-Should read "On Nana, who said your getting old? Well, I eat no other woman's food but yours."

3)relatives involved.-"involved" should be "included".

4)but as her mum had taught her,-There should be a comma after "but".

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.