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Review #4475643
Viewing a review of:
Wheel of Fortune  [18+]
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by ridinghhood-p.boutilier
         Review for entry/chapter: "March 17, 2019" 
Review of Wheel of Fortune  
Review by Cubbee
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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         *Penguin* Greetings, ridinghhood-p.boutilier ! I am reviewing this because I am part of "I Write in 2019" , *Smile*

         First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. *Smile* Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

Title
         Perfect. As you do not mention your haiku is about dementia, it works perfectly, leaving no question at all of what your piece is about.

My First Impression
         It's so good! I love it. I've written poetry and short stories that have to do with Alzheimer's Disease, as my father-in-law and my daughter's mother-in-law both had it and eventually they passed away from it. One was in his 90s and the other, her 60s. So when I read this piece, it really touched my heart. Nice work. *Smile*

Punctuation/Grammar/Typos
         *Asteriskb* No suggestions at all.

Other Suggestions
         *Asteriskv* No suggestions. Everything looks great!

Thoughts/Emotions
         *Asterisko* Your words emerged me into the spiral, and I could almost feel the confusion of a wandering person, unsure of which way to turn. This is beautiful, in a sad sort of way, of course. I also became interested in the note below the haiku... The Tarot of the Crone. The explaination you wrote about how we don't always get to choose the way our lives will turn out, hit me. Wow. It's so true. So true. Thank you for sharing this! *Heart*

         *Starb* My favorite line
                             Lost in a spiral

*Penguin* Nicely written! I have no suggestions. *Penguin*

*Fisho* Have a great day and *Fishb*
K e e p on W r i t i n g !
~Cubby ")
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