Hi THANKFUL SONALI 17 WDC YEARS! ! I'm here to review your story for a few reasons - first and foremost, Happy Account Anniversary month! Second, congratulations on your winning (worst ) entry in Kit's "Intentionally Bad Story Contest"  - great (bad) work! However, I noticed your piece seems to have a 3 rating! Well, that simply won't do ... Hopefully this 1 rating will bring the average back down as it should be

Your repetition in this piece is fabulously bad! Explaining how many hands and legs and eyes and tails and heads and fingers the characters have was really funny You actually made me laugh out loud at the line: "He smiled with his lips." Great work! And "Kalyan accused, accusingly," "I confessed, confessingly," and "I gasped, gaspingly" are just so perfectly horrible writing, I don't need to say any more.

It was a joy reading this story You certainly deserved to win! Despite all the awkward repetition and unnecessary adjectives, your grammar was clear throughout the piece. That really helped keep the momentum going and made the intentional errors you included stand out even more. I also liked the font size, color, and font style you choose. I know those are minor things, but they enhanced the story.

The only suggestion I have for you would be to include a little note at the bottom purposefully mentioning the contest this story was entered in and explaining to any reviewers what you expect for ratings. I would also move the word count to the bottom so it doesn't distract the reader in the beginning

Thanks for sharing, and again, happy anni!
-Emily

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