Hello, Azrael Tseng
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019.

My Impression
This is a fantastic little vacation from reality. I love the rich imagery and language throughout. I like the progression of this poem, going from playing D&D, to being fully immersed and actually experiencing the fantasy world and then being in the real world at the zoo. I like the imagery of the children "Naked with glee around a cave fire." Just brilliant. Thought-provoking, entertaining, and interesting.

Suggestions
Just one. It's not a big deal, but I'm wondering if you meant for the first word of each line to be capitalized? I know google docs does it automatically and I always have to change it where I don't want it, like in the middle of a sentence.

Grammar/Punctuation/Usage
Everything looked good to me, though admittedly I was too involved in the poem itself to notice. After reading a second time, I still didn't see anything.

Rating Explanation
I'm giving this a 5 because it's really quite good, for all the reasons mentioned above. I wish you good luck in the contest!

IceSkating SugarCube

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