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Review #4480440
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24 Syllables Poetry  [13+]
Entries for the 24 syllables poetry contest
by IceSkatingSugarCube
         Review for entry/chapter: "The Mocking Waves" 
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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         *Penguin* Greetings, IceSkatingSugarCube ! I am reviewing this because I am part of "I Write in 2019" , *Smile*

         First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. *Smile* Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

Title
         I love your entry title, The Mocking Waves. We've done a lot of camping and kayaking along Lake Superior and the waves have a life of their own. I never thought of them as mocking before this, but now I will! *Bigsmile* They've certainly mocked me in my kayak more than once.

My First Impression
         The bold colored font works well with this piece, representing water, loneliness, and sand. *Smile*

Punctuation/Grammar/Typos
         *Asteriskb* No suggestions.

Thoughts/Emotions
         *Asterisko* There's something about the water that lures us in. A moody force that shares its emotions openly, from calm to treacherous, has a life of its own. And now, thanks to your poem, I feel its mocking ways, too. *Wink*

         *Starb* My favorite line...
                             The beach whispers new directions.

*Penguin* Nicely written! *Penguin*

*Fisho* Have a great day and *Fishb*
K e e p on W r i t i n g !
~Cubby ")
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