Hello there!

We are both participating in the "I Write in 2019" Activity, and I just posted one of my contest entries right after your post. Therefore, I will be reviewing this particular piece of your writing. This is what brought me to your work.

For reviews, I like to begin by pointing out that I'm no expert, and that you can do as you wish with the feedback I provide. Ultimately, it is your decision what is best for you and your writing. My suggestions are given in friendship/camaraderie and with a hope to help us all grow closer to being the best writers we can be.

- - Kudos - -
nice, unique word choice
clear images

- - Favorite, unique, compelling word choice and/or phrases - -
"I scrub vagabond charcoal ash"
"summer hibernates"
(also the title!)

- - Imagery / Figures of Speech / Figurative Language - -
IMAGERY - - Line 1, Line 2,
irony & nice almost-personification with "summer hibernates"
Line 4
Very nice images, especially combined wit your title. I think many readers will relate, and will have fun with the unique descriptions and word choices you used.

- - Questions and/or Room for Improvement - -
Very nice as is!
I often submit to this same contest, and I believe they require that entrants either italicize or bold the prompt word. I'm wondering what the word for this day's contest was. Was it perhaps vagabond? Indicating that is about my only thought for improvement . . . or I can see why one would remove the highlighting after the contest when it's used for other purposes.

Fun piece! You created interesting images and a unique experience.

Keep writing!
Ruth Rodgers

RRodgersWrites





My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .