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Review #4481273
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 Trauma  [13+]
Sexual assault - A roller coaster ride through the permanent dent in my soul
by Izzyb1972
Review of Trauma  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello, Izzyb1972.
This is a sad poem, but I can understand why you wrote it. I can only hope that this isn't from a real experience of your own, but after peeking at the rest of your portfolio and seeing some of the things you've written about, I have a feeling it is.
Sexual assault (rape) happens all too often in this country (and probably everywhere else), and it needs to be dealt with. The people who commit these horrific offenses are scumbags, and I personally think they should be castrated, along with serving an indeterminate prison sentence!
I'm a man, but I understand what you mean by a roller coaster ride, and that permanent dent in your soul is a perfect metaphor.
One thing I think you should know is that writing down your feelings can be very cathartic, so maybe that's why you did this. If so, don't stop. Holding those feeling inside will only tear you apart!
One tiny niggle you might want to check:
'As As he leaves her with cruel memories and pain'
Kee ponw ritin gon, Izzyb, please! And welcome to WdC. If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
PS-You might want to get your bioblock (biography) set up so we can know a little something about you (hobbies, favorite books/authors, location, etc.), but that's up to you, of course.
PSS-And since you’re new here, perhaps you’d like to check out "Noticing Newbies"  and introduce yourself to the rest of the community if you haven’t already.

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