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It's been a pleasure to review your story "Invalid Item"  on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" 

First of all I like the beautiful pictures you have attached here. Those picture tells this story.

*FlowerV*FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a beautiful romantic story. Wonderfully told and written. I especially liked the theme.

*BurstP* THE STORY: In this story you describe the life of Ariana Winfrey who is a pretty woman who falls in love with thirty-one years of a man named Shadow. Ariana was putting her career first than relationship. But an incident makes her feel cheated. And at the end she realized he mistake when finally Shadow described the family secret.

*BurstP* DIALOGUES: The title of the story fits the themes of the story. I like the happy ending. The dialogues are believable.

*BurstP* CHARACTERS: All the characters are well developed. I especially liked the character “Ariana”. You crafted hem so beautifully.

*BurstP* SUGGESTION: I didn't any mistake.

*BurstP* FINAL THOUGHT: you are a good storyteller. I appreciate the way you are telling this story.

I like the emotions evokes in this story.
Overall it told beautifully and well-written. I enjoyed it!!

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