INTRODUCTION

Hello ZuluMomma14 ,

I found your item "Here’s to Pete"  in the review request thread and thought I'd give it a read/review in honor of Poetry Month before it ends, so here we are.

WHAT I LIKED:

Sentiment

The strongest aspect of the piece was, in my opinion, the sentiment behind it. When you lose someone, sometimes words just don't feel like enough to express the loss regardless of how hard you try, and you did such a wonderful job expressing that in this piece.

My Favorite Line

Tying into my above point, there was an excerpt from the poem that I thought exemplifies that sentiment particularly well:



Relationship

I also like that you clarified your relationship with the subject at the very end. It made it seem like you were honoring him as a person, but then gave the audience a bit of context into how this good man fit into your life as a part of your family.




Title

If I had one suggestion for you, it would be to reconsider the title.

"Here's to Pete" just makes the poem seem like it's going to be less heart felt and reverent than it is. I think something a bit warmer might be a bit more fitting for the tone of the poem - but of course, that's just my personal opinion.

CONCLUSION:

This was a well-constructed piece that rang true and is able to eloquently express the idea that eloquence is seldom enough. I hope the this review has been at least somewhat helpful, and wish you all the best.

Sincerely,

-Cat
















My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .