INTRODUCTION

Hello MatildaRose ,

I know I already reviewed one of your poems for Poetry Month, but I found your item "My dear."  in the review request thread and thought I'd leave you with my thoughts.

So, here we go

WHAT I LIKED:

Color

I like the constant reminders you had of blue and green through the poem, tying the memories together almost. It was like they were literally splashing bits of color onto the timeline of this couple despite their struggles, and something about that really just stuck out to me as lovely.

End

This wasn't exactly the happiest of stories, but I thought that the end hit the proper notes of sweet and somber. The penultimate stanza in particular read very well, I think you did a good job with it.




Final Line

I do have one tiny suggestion, and it's regarding the last line:



The way that this was phrased just made it seem almost like they meant different things to each other. It was a small thing, but it gave me pause, and the fact that it was the last line meant that hesitation was the last note that I was left with. It might be worth revisiting, if you decide to keep working with this piece - or maybe it was just me being nitpicky.

CONCLUSION:

Overall I thought this was a great piece. You tackled a sad story very well, hitting all the right notes along the way. Aside from that one moment of pause I mentioned toward the end, the piece read very smoothly, and I enjoyed it immensely. I hope that I get to read some more of your work in the future.

Sincerely,

-Cat
















My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .